ok
i will be frank with you, it has ALOT of room for improvement.
to start out with, you absolutley have to stop using that gay FL voice generator! you're better off recording yourself speaking, it just sucks. the notes have random dynamics, bad pronunciation, and it is just plain cheap and overused.
the brassy synth that comes in right after...well, cool use of a fade in, but you sort of overdid it. it almost killed my ears. it was way too loud. i dunno, it wasnt that great of a synth either. it was pretty low quality and buzzy, choose some better ones, like tweak/master the generator presets on FL.
good beats you have there, im glad you diversified the percussion. you really needed a kick though. the snare was pretty punchy, a sturdy dance snare, but kick/hat isnt really good in techno. not too big of an issue. overall, good job with that.
needs more of a melody though. plus you have what, 5 instruments in there? come on man, diversify it up a little. use a better, stronger bass. more sounds. better sounds. that's all you really need to do. 3/5.
-Exodus